ext_173003 ([identity profile] ladyphoenixmage.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] alixtii 2010-01-02 06:08 pm (UTC)

It's great to see how much this has grown up since I last read it. I noticed that you seem to have confused some of your subjects (in chapter 3, Morgan surely does not grab her own shoulder to prevent her escape). I am definitely loving this story and the knowledge that you are still working on it. I'm also thrilled to see that the "Assimilated with interest" line has completely disappeared. ;) Is this your final draft?

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