Beta Request

The first draft of my Giles/Kennedy "she's not straight they just love each other" fic is pretty much done, and I was wondering if anyone would be willing to look it over? For the usual things--errors in grammar, usage, and mechanics, stylistic issues, characterization, girl parts not working that way, etc.--and also to make sure that I didn't unintentionally imply that all a lesbian needs is to find the right man (not that I think it would be very easy to get that message from what I wrote, but a second set of eyes can't hurt).

It's a little over two thousand words, fairly explicit, and rather introspective as well. Any help anyone could give me would be greatly appreciated.